Sydney & Paula At the Beach House
Paula is uncontrollable, words spill from her
lips as a wild river into the ocean. Sydney's
words are broken sea shells; smaller than
the pieces of Paula's heart. All Sydney dare
do is hold her love's moist face and caress
the trembling body; pleading forgiveness
with shaky hands.
The sun rises, warmth spreads gently
through the lover's bodies, healing their
pain and sealing their love, again.
i snare her tongue
cradle it
to perfection
i snare her heart
cradle it
to love
Nadege
8/09
I love the style in this piece...love the description and detail as well. The imagery is also very lovely.
ReplyDeleteTY! write girl. i was leery about this
ReplyDeletehaibun or prose piece, revising serveral times.
Wow Nadge, when you say "words spill from her
ReplyDeletelips as a wild river into the ocean" I'm speechless, just beautiful. I can't imagine you had to revise anything.
Meagan
This was sweet, but deep too. I love how you spilled the words in this piece, and the reuniting of the lovers.
ReplyDeletehey there, meagan - great comment - TY.
ReplyDeletethat's exactly right amias, I wanted the
ReplyDeletewords to spill. TY.
Ah..the last few lines are killer! thanks for this one.
ReplyDeletepurple, how marvelous. TY. please submit
ReplyDeletean erotic sensual FIVE poem. i know the
poem will be amazing.
very well done:)...
ReplyDeletehey flower, TY.
ReplyDeleteVery intimate, moving and I agree with Amias. The style, the way it's written spills over until the very end when the lovers are united similar to that of a heart-shape coming together.
ReplyDeletewow. hadn't noticed that. TY. love your
ReplyDeleteblog - very lovely.