Saturday, May 16, 2009

3:00 AM

FIVE


be my onion girl
let me peel you nude
my mouth shivering
on your second heart
bits of you go down



FIVE: a poem with 5 lines,
each line = 5 syllables. [I. 2008]
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14 comments:

  1. Linda S. SochaMay 17, 2009 at 12:40 AM

    Definitely purple:>) Love it
    Linda

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  2. OpaqueMay 17, 2009 at 2:51 AM

    Hmm, nicely written!!! The onion reference is quite unique, frankly. At least, I've never heard or read of one before. Keep writing!!!

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  3. NadegeMay 17, 2009 at 4:57 AM

    cool bro. ty.

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  4. NadegeMay 17, 2009 at 4:57 AM

    greetings, linda. ty.

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  5. AnonymousMay 17, 2009 at 12:10 PM

    Gives new meaning to the onion, indeed. A fervent, five'r, full of passion, as always.

    PLL, C.

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  6. NadegeMay 17, 2009 at 2:00 PM

    hey cordie how are you? ty for stopping by.

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  7. magiceyeMay 17, 2009 at 6:06 PM

    brilliantly seductive...

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  8. NadegeMay 17, 2009 at 6:48 PM

    oOo..ty magiceye

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  9. The Write GirlMay 17, 2009 at 6:50 PM

    There is a lot of passion here...the onion metaphor is brilliant. I like it a lot : )

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  10. NadegeMay 17, 2009 at 6:59 PM

    hey pretty girl, ty.

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  11. LanyMay 18, 2009 at 8:56 PM

    holy shit girl...that's amazing poetry...unlike anything i've ever experienced.

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  12. NadegeMay 19, 2009 at 6:46 PM

    hey lany, i'm majorly enthused by your response. TY.

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  13. keedMay 20, 2009 at 10:21 AM

    sweet words

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  14. NadegeMay 20, 2009 at 6:06 PM

    ty, billy.

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