Saturday, May 16, 2009

3:00 AM

FIVE


be my onion girl
let me peel you nude
my mouth shivering
on your second heart
bits of you go down



FIVE: a poem with 5 lines,
each line = 5 syllables. [I. 2008]

14 comments:

  1. Definitely purple:>) Love it
    Linda

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  2. Hmm, nicely written!!! The onion reference is quite unique, frankly. At least, I've never heard or read of one before. Keep writing!!!

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  3. Gives new meaning to the onion, indeed. A fervent, five'r, full of passion, as always.

    PLL, C.

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  4. hey cordie how are you? ty for stopping by.

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  5. There is a lot of passion here...the onion metaphor is brilliant. I like it a lot : )

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  6. holy shit girl...that's amazing poetry...unlike anything i've ever experienced.

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  7. hey lany, i'm majorly enthused by your response. TY.

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